Saturday, September 20, 2014

The Tree and the Knight: A Shadorma


The Tree and the Knight:
A Shadorma
 Beneath my
Branches he murdered
The vixen
Her pelt he
Now drapes shamelessly across
His brutish shoulders

~Opal~

Shadorma is a Spanish 6-line poem of 3/5/3/3/7/5 syllable lines respectively.

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9 comments:

  1. Wanda PsychoSeptember 20, 2014 at 9:00 AM

    It amazes me how you manage to tell a complete tale in so few words.

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    1. UnknownSeptember 21, 2014 at 2:28 AM

      Thanks, W. It amazes me that I was able to do so within the syllable constraints.

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  2. MarcySeptember 21, 2014 at 8:20 AM

    I hadn't heard of a Shadorma before. Great job! It must have been tough to get the syllables exactly right.

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    1. Wanda PsychoSeptember 21, 2014 at 10:37 PM

      Our team uses syllable counters from poetrysoup.com or Haiku With Teeth. It's a nice little discovery!
      Thanks for stopping by, on behalf of Opal.

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 21, 2014 at 12:10 PM

    Wow, a poem with syllable constraints! This is amazing! I must give it a whirl :)

    Stopping by from the Moonshine grid.

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    1. Wanda PsychoSeptember 21, 2014 at 10:38 PM

      I haven't attempted a Shadorma yet, but I enjoy doing Haiku. It's deceptively simple, or simply deceptive! ;-)
      Thanks for stopping by, on behalf of Opal.

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 21, 2014 at 7:00 PM

    So glad someone else felt sorry for the fox, too!
    I'm in the middle of a poem to the poor dead thing.
    Words so perfectly selected --

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    1. Wanda PsychoSeptember 21, 2014 at 10:40 PM

      The members of Team Netherworld aren't keen on fur. In the modern age, there's no reason to wear fur. The animals that are raised for their fur are kept in tiny cages for their entire miserable lives--well, won't get on the old soapbox.
      Thanks for visiting, on behalf of Opal.

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  5. Bastet's Waka LibraryOctober 1, 2014 at 11:39 PM

    I don't know how I missed this delightful take on the prompt ... very well written a superb shadorma and I enjoyed the pungent reproval of that dasderdly knight!

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