A life filled with events unexpected
A soul epitomizing imperfection
Goes slipping through the cracks unnoticed
One fateful night she was forced to see with new eyes
She now fights to begin again in spite of everything
~Cie~
Notes:
I began with the intent to make a cascade poem, but once these five lines were there in front of me, I felt that extending the poem would only make it seem unnecessarily verbose. I felt that this poem needed to be brief and to the point, so I am leaving it as a stark free verse.
Less is more sometimes. Great poem! Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
Deletelove your free verse, Cara <3
ReplyDeleteKind thanks. :-)
DeleteWell done! This is a haunting line: "She now fights to begin again in spite of everything".
ReplyDeleteThank you. In spite of the many times I've been knocked down, I'm either too stubborn or too stupid to stay down.
DeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteIt conveys all it needs to in five lines and love the last line.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I'm kind of proud of it myself!
DeleteBrief and to the point it is, and says so much.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I think it would have been a mistake to add more. :-)
DeleteSweet! I wish you had a "like" button.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I like Wordpress for it's "like" button, but I don't like it for much else. I had some Wordpress blogs for a while, but I really prefer working with Blogger.
Deleteit says a lot in a small space!
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
DeleteLength is not everything in a poem. This was fantastic just as is.
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