Image by Beverly Tan
Ondina's Paradelle
O Stormy Sea, wash over me
O Stormy Sea, wash over me
Take this shipwreck of a life
Take this shipwreck of a life
To a parallel dimension
Where I may meet my love
I crave his delicious kisses
I crave his delicious kisses
Although I know him not
Although I know him not
I long for him with all my soul
Only his love can save me
Sounding with a crunch, I hear footsteps approaching
Sounding with a crunch, I hear footsteps approaching
I hide away my dream from wicked souls
I hide away my dream from wicked souls
I have not abandoned you, Beloved, remember your Ondina loves you
In her shadow you may rest, until she can return
Long not, Beloved, know your Ondina may return with delicious kisses
Take my life, crunch all wicked souls, have rest with him
Hear her footsteps sounding, approaching to a parallel dimension for you
Where I may meet my loves in shadow, hide away from my abandoned soul
O stormy sea wash over me, until she remember although
Crave, only his love can save this shipwreck of a dream
Notes:
The Princess Ondina is a character in Team Netherworld's serial/novel in progress, Fetch. The story is a paranormal romance with sci-fi elements which honors the late H.P. Lovecraft, as well as other writers of the Cthulhu Mythos genre.
I'm not sure about that last stanza, but my brain just short-circuited. I can do no more!
~Wanda~
The Design is simple:
Stanza 1: 1, 1, 2, 2, 3, 4
Stanza 2: 5, 5, 6, 6, 7, 8
Stanza 3: 9, 9, 10, 10, 11, 12
Stanza 4: 13, 14, 15, 16, 17, 18
For the most difficult piece of this poetic puzzle, the final stanza of the paradelle does not repeat like the preceding stanzas, rather the final six lines must contain every word from the first three stanzas, and only those words, again using them only once to form completely new lines.
A beauty.. I tried hard to write in this format could not do so.
ReplyDeleteBravo u did a great work .
Believe me, that last stanza had me feeling as if my head was going to explode! I'm not really satisfied with it, but I figured I'd only make it worse if I kept messing with it. I'd gotten to the point of does...not...compute!
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Yowza ... that is one mean form ... and what a story - bravo! Bastet
ReplyDeleteIt is rather like wrestling a six-armed bear wielding chain saws! Thanks for visiting!
DeleteAmazing! What a story! Hats off to you for writing in this form. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm kinda proud of myself for getting through it!
DeleteThanks much for visiting. :-)
I love the strory as seen through your poem. Excellent!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. :-)
Deletetake this shipwrech of a life ..... so poignant !
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
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