The Crack of Dawn in Holbrook, AZ
At the Crack of Dawn
A Monoverse Variation in 13 Lines
At the crack of dawn
I woke to find you gone
At the crack of dawn
I knew that you'd moved on
At the crack of dawn
I sang a mournful song
At the crack of dawn
You have done me wrong
At the crack of dawn
The day seems unbearably long
At the crack of dawn
I don't know if I can stay strong
At the crack of dawn
~Helena~
Guess what time of day I read (& enjoyed) this....
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear it! :-D
Deletewow powerful fro me reading at the crack of dawn
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
DeleteNice rhythm. With the crack of dawn repeating so frequently, I almost heard it crack (or maybe that was your heart). Sorry. I like the way you wrote it in 13 lines.
ReplyDeleteHere is a crack of dawn photo I took last week. http://www.looseleafnotes.com/2014/05/crack-of-dawn/
My 13 is at http://looseleafnotes.com
Thank you. :-)
DeleteThe heart is healed from the incident that somewhat inspired this. It was nearly 20 years ago when I decided that I had to finish things with my now ex husband for good.
I woke to find someone gone at the crack of dawn many moons ago. Glad it's over. Wonderful monoverse.
ReplyDeleteSame for me. In my case, he was my husband and the father of my three children. I tried to make it work, several times, but in the end there was no way I could without sacrificing my and my children's well being.
DeleteI know it was a rough thing for you to go through, Helena, but at least you were wise enough to see what had to be done and strong enough to see it through. Some people are unable to break the ties, even when they keep getting hurt repeatedly.
DeleteCool. I love the line--at the crack of dawn
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Thanks. It was a suggestion at Thursday 13. I just wrote it down! :-D
DeleteThat's very nice. I like the word play and the repetition.
ReplyDeleteThank you! It looks like an easy style on the surface, but then I found myself saying "what else rhymes or semi-rhymes with Dawn?"
DeleteBeautiful. I admire poets; they are so graceful with words. Thank for sharing.
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Ooh, lovely! Thank you, on behalf of Helena. I hope she shares with me! :-p
DeleteA poem with much excitement!
ReplyDeleteThank you, on behalf of Helena. :-)
DeleteWonderful my poems tend to jump around but this flows seamlessly
ReplyDeleteThat's Helena for you--smooth as silk! I think my poems tend to be a little more on the "jittery" side too. I like free verse a lot because there are no rules!
DeleteVery well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, on behalf of Helena. :-)
DeleteFor some reason I can hear a music track with this. It sounds like a country song! How neat.
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