unable
to get hibiscus red
the artist eats the flower
flower becomes the artist
artist becomes the flower
Fr. Raymond & Cie
Notes:
The Hokku (Haiku) stanza was created by Father Raymond Roselip (1917 - 1983), a Catholic priest who has been rightfully recognized as a twentieth-century master of English Haiku.
The Akegu (two-line closing stanza) was created by yours truly.
Very good.
ReplyDeleteThanks. :-D
DeleteOh, i love this transcendental poem!
ReplyDeleteDoes this work for haiku poets too?
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely!
Deletepretty Zen. :)
ReplyDeleteWonderfully penned!! Very clever.
ReplyDeleteIt was one of those times when it came to me like a flash--like a vision! I just wrote it down.
Delete(Stealing from Arlo Guthrie and his Motorcycle Song with this reply.)
Love the thought of becoming a flower.
ReplyDeleteMe too. :-)
DeleteSomewhere i read folks say "you are what you eat"
ReplyDelete(SMILES) nice one
much love...
Well, surely there are worse things one can be than a hibiscus! :-D
DeleteYour closing lines are seamless in their perfection
ReplyDeleteThank you. :-)
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